Topic sentence-The disadvantage of my motorbike
What I am talking about is the disadvantage of my motorbike, why I am saying so? That's because,it is pity I can not ride it in raining day. That will make my motorbike be broken down, and can not get start again. Another point is, it is quite inconvenience that every time I ride it, there is not place to put my stuff in or hang on the motorbike. So if you want to buy a new motorbike? Take my advice, do not buy the same motorbike as I am riding now!
posted by Allen @ 6:33 AM
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What I am talking about is the disadvantage of my motorbike, why I am saying so? That's because,it is pity I can not ride it in raining day.
-->Make a topic sentence. Make your point clear and list the disadvantages you want to discuss.
That will make my motorbike be broken down, and can not get start again.
-->My motorbike breaks down and cannot get started again in a raining day.
Another point is, it is quite inconvenience that every time I ride it, there is not place to put my stuff in or hang on the motorbike.
-->it is quite inconvenient...no place to put my stuff in or on ...
So if you want to buy a new motorbike? Take my advice, do not buy the same motorbike as I am riding now!
-->delete (?)
-->a new motorbike, take my advice...
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